aww very sad, the rhyming was good and it had a good flow. keep up the good work

That was a really sad, emotional poem, so awful that you feel really bad, I wish I could help, if there is anything I can do, please just ask.. You have so much talent in your writing I hope you are ok, well done on another good write, keep writing and take care, I know how you feel in this poem

xxxxx

wow that is deep, your really talented
thank you for your comment it means heaps

love larochelle

Hey hun, tis was really good..i really really liked it..one thing--im not sure if lib was suppose to b lip or not..jw..well keep up the great work..
luv ya,
LoVeAbLeShOrTie

i thought it was really good but i dont understand the last 2 parts..i gave you a 4/5

wow its really good

x0x0

no, it makes sense... Everyone has two sides when they are depressed... one is like GO AWAY I HATE THIS WORLD, and the other is like HELP ME PLEASE I NEED YOUR LOVE..
makes perfect sense..
Great job. dont second guess your work young lady! lol j/k
love,
liz

Not sure why you posted 2 poems in one, maybe one was to explain what you do and how you act and the other one what you think inside? Correct me if I'm wrong.

ANyways, they where both very good.

Best wishes,
Patrik

Nicely written! that was worth a read and i think your best one! (if you could please return the favor(s)) newayz great job! the flow was there with the emotion so it was great! 5/5

It makes perfect sense to me, sometimes I have feelings like that, and its always mixed. I hope you are okay hun.

"I know this is really bad and that it doesn't make sense, but thanks for reading anyway"

Tears are welling up in my eyes...such pure emotions in here...stop telling your readers your opinion on your work please. That is what it is, your opinion...my opinion is much different than yours, and I see others agree with me. This poem is pretty incredible to me...I mean, I love it...the most out of all the ones I've read...don't worry about it making sense, poets don't always have to make perfect sense...some people will get it, some won't. That's how it'll always be.

The first part is how so many feel, felt, and will feel...and it's so sad it makes me cry.... the second part is very touching, and I hope your mind concentrates on that part.
Worded excellently...flows well, also. And thank YOU for sharing. I'm glad you asked me to read this one.

It's perfectly fine as is...but if you wanted to improve it, you could try making the second part 4 stanzas like the first part...say more on the other side to even it out...say more of the opposite I guess... You don't need to, but it might help you think better of it. *shrugs*

Take care, dear. Keep on writing.

undying blusher
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It is great

That makes heaps of sense! I remember feeling like that and i bet there are heaps of ppl who feel that way

I love it, best of yours so far. Beautifully done.

Both of these were really good, but i would make these into two seperate poems! Work on these id like to see both of them when there done.

No this poem is not bad at all baby, it is actually really full of emotions and feelings. I was blown away with how powerful it is. Been there too many times to count, but remember you can always grab onto my hand. Love you hun!

-Tainted Mikochan

I dont think thts really bad. I think its really good. Cute and sad.