Step thru the flames

I am not a musician, but this is written as a loud metal song. ALL CAPS is meant to be screamed. I suppose only i can put it to the music that is in my head, but i also think this stands well as a poems, too. let me know what you think!
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It seems like it's been an eternity
since i've seen the light of day
blinded by the scars,
i wait for the touch of another
just remind me that i can feel

take me on. destroy all fear
i surrender to the torture of your demise
the pain of existence
is all that i have
without the destructive feelings you throw at me

STEP THRU THE FLAMES of a haunted past
inject your sadness into my veins
blistered by the hatred of your soul
forever my eyes will burn (THROUGH YOU)

EMPTY HEART (dying inside)
STEP THROUGH THE FLAMES (haunted past)
I REACH FOR THE END THAT'S ALWAYS TOO FAR AWAY
HATED
AM
I

take me on.
destroy all that i have
as i surrender to the absence of my heart
breaking off
all that i need
scorched by the flames of you (haunting past)

feel the inside
of a blackened heart (hollow inside)
remember what's done is done and is always wrong (forever undone)
fight the cancer
destroy all you own
and bring the fiery devil to his knees
i witness the sadness (heartbreaking sadness)
as i look in the sockets where your EYES USED TO BE
goodbyes aren't always forever
but this one IS (HATED AM I)

STEP THRU THE FLAMES of a haunted past
inject your sadness into the heart of my soul
blistered by the hatred coursing your veins
forever my eyes will burn (THROUGH YOU)

My sadness is a lonely road
even when you're there
please go back to wherever you came
and leave me to burn inside your desire
SADNESS
HEARTACHE
DARKNESS IS FOREVER MY OWN
PAINFUL
DELIVERANCE
I AM NOW ALONE

HATED! BY! YOU!