Great song!?

the flow was good also :)

I see why you won :)

x)

Wow! this is awesome. Glad to see some more people on here writing songs as poetry..to me the best poems can be songs. check out my two songs I wrote--My Sweetest Joy & Someday. hope to see more work from u.

It's really good, I love it. Great song.

heyhey great song! Beautifully written! Wish i could write songs that good. I've only written two but i don't think there very good lolz! meh oh well wut can ya do eh. lolz! Ne wayz Keep up da awesome work!! Take Care! Byez! xoxo
~Luvz~
~Chica~

great song. keep writing.

You did an amazing job on this song! I wish I could hear it just by reading I can tell it would be incredible. Very well written! I hope you will post more! Take Care! Brooke~

Wow, brilliant piece Garrett. You've got talent. Keep it up. <3

-Mortalidaga
xxTakeCarexx

It's really good, I'd be interested to hear it when it's set to music. Great lyrics!

wow, amazing song. i'd really like to hear it played. great job. keep it up!
crystal

i heard it being sung as i read it in my head...well done...nice repetition...meaningful... you need to get some others up now ;)

xxx

incredible! very impressive! keep it up!

This might sound like a completely stupid question, but it was meant to be a song right?? Well regardless, whether it was a song or not, the repetition really worked well in this poem to bring out the effect of the feelings you were trying to portray. Very well done. Sorry I leave such long comments, but if I really like the poem/poet than I feel the need to make excruciatingly long comments.

Kalika

i loved it. out of the three you've done so far this is my favourite. it has a great flow. keep writing. can you let us know when you've done more so we can check them out. love your work xxx

Wow gr8 job your really good keep it up 5/5

WOW!!! that really should be a song!

Hey,
I like this, it sounds as though it could be a song. It had a certain rhythm to it as I read it - even silently. Well, wotever, sorry if ive taken this the wrong way, its a good piece. Also thanks for your words on my post on the discussion board. It was useful and comforting to know that I am not the only one to experience this so called "dillusion".
xXxForesakenxXx

Very nice i like

Amazing