Please Child

by Jacklyn   Aug 25, 2005


I see you child, I see you child,
So full of anger and denial,
I’m sorry I’ve never before offered my help,
But now I’m here to help you through.

Please take my hand,
Please take my strength,
I offer my words for you to take,
I’ll try to take your hurt and steal you pain.

Just try to release you anger,
Release your hate,
No one should have to feel this way,
Especially someone of your age,

I wish I swathe signs before,
I wish I could help you more,
I’ll try my best I promise that,
What ever it takes to see this fade.

Please child put down that bottle,
Put away that knife I’ll help you now,
Please child stop hurting yourself.
You’ll make it through, just stop causing yourself more wounds.

Please child, you’re my only one,
I love you so much, I can’t explain,
Please child my only child, put down the knife and bottle,
I see your cries for help and now I’m here for you.

~it's probably going to go through some fix ups. just let me know what could be better~

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  • 18 years ago

    by ElegantlyWasted

    I like the way you have written this; It is almost like a desperate plea for somebodys salvation - yet a warning of the guilt that can/could be inflicted if such acts were committed. (I make no sense sometimes)
    Anyway hun, take care, much love,
    Always.

    -Kals.

  • 18 years ago

    by katie!

    Wow, this poem really was beautiful, another piece of art from you, each poem you write brings up many new ideas and different stories, well done to you, this was really powerful and I really felt the emotion of the person talking, I could imagine so many people reading it as I read it aloud..

    This stanza was fantastic
    "Please child, you’re my only one,
    I love you so much, I can’t explain,
    Please child my only child, put down the knife and bottle,
    I see your cries for help and now I’m here for you"

    Wow, well done to you and keep up the good writing..

    take care
    xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

  • 18 years ago

    by JJ

    The second stanza, 8th line, 'you' should be 'your'. Other than that... I like the concept of this poem. good job, keep up the good work!

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