Kinda long....but beautiful! really unique and sweet...Great job! 5/5 :-)

I loke it :) like i said you had better fun a great girl to shar these with. if not go got one LOL :]

Good poem!!! Keep writing

Good...i got a little bit bored w/ it but again...thats my own loss....b/c i dont have much patience....as you may have noticed that my peoms are quite short....but never the less its very good 5/5

Whilom, in a rainy day of early June,
While wand'ring in the Labyrinth of Solitude
catchy lines!
And such was the Divine Sentence
another good line
For aye, we were the same, the one, Dunkel.
a very unexpected ending. i like this one a lot. nicely written, 5/5

Wow !! its stunning...!!! how'd u write that ? its beautiful... im left speechless...!!!
awesome piece
good luck !
amy

I adore your writting, again i must give you a 5/5

Its long, but completely beautiful all the way through ^_^ well done

I luv the way you wrote that, like in da older language..tis good...

This needs no improvements !! Really, really good.
I love the wording and your particular style of writing.

xxx cici xxx

Hey great poem, you write old fashion sort of which you dont see much. but i like it and wish i could write like that. you have a great talent, keep it up. i think it is good under the love section.

Im sorry, i just couldnt get into the poem.... it must be too deep for me or something... maybe you could suggest a new one for me to read???
take care
amanda

You are Shakespeare the Second! yay! great poem, wonderful rhyme, beautiful language and amazing story! What more can I say, dark and gorgerous at the same time. and where in creation did you find those words, they were all great!

Good Writing!
beth

I have no complaints with this poem, I happend to enjoy the poem very much.

"But all became like ice, so paralysed,
And when one drop of rain had reached our hell,
I saw my self reflected, in this man's eyes,
For aye, we were the same, the one, Dunkel."

This stanza was my absolute favourite, I heart the sudden twist.

( )_( )
(='.'=)
(")-(") Arrivederci!

Wow...i can say that this is just a tad bit
~FanCy~...its cool thoe..i like how the wordz just flow when u read it...wow...really good...keep it up 5/5

Well, it was certainly long, but it kept my interest through every word. I really liked the structure, though the rhyming scheme is off a bit. Nothing too major :) Other than that, Great poem!!! Keep up the great writing!
~BJ~

Wow!!!
this is excellent. i found absoluty nothing wrong with it. even though it was long it kept my attention the whole time.
good work

Writing in this style is incredibly hard so to make such a beautiful poem out of it, takes a great deal of talent. It is incredible.
"Yea, I was poor, and could not buy her jewelry"
This is the only line that in my opinion did not seem to fit. It is slightly long and knocks off the flow. Excellent poem though. 5/5

Although the story of this poem is not untold, you've brought it across magnificently. In honesty, when I began to read this poem, I expected another trite and "overdone" poem...yet I realized there was too much talent to give such limp entertainment. Well done.

One thing i would suggest is some sort of rhyming scheme that is more obvious and consistent.

Great Write,
Christa

This is a great, long poem. Has a beautiful message and story. It doesn't need improvements, it's perfect. I love it! 5/5

XoXo
G.a.B.y.