The way I used to be

Again, you need to shorten some sentences because it kinda threw off the whole poem. Your wordings is wonderful though and the topic isn't so bad.

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Hey man, that was a awesome poem... can relate to it alot... Keep writing!!! luv yaz! *liz*

1. I felt that the repititious use of "I" throughout the poem was not as effective as it might have been intended to be. It seemed slightly tiresome by the end of the second stanza.

2. The poem seems to just fade away at the end. It doesn't seem like much of a conclusion, and so another, more definitive stanza can be added.

3. I suppose the contrast between then and now is effective, but I think you could still make that contrast without being blatant about it.

This was a good poem, but there are many things you could do to improve it.

Good flow to this and good rhyming. keep it up and good job once again!

I loved this part: "Now I am sad
No longer proud
I wish I wasnt me
Just blending into the crowd" and beleive it or not I wouldnt change a thing in this one, great job thats a 5/5