You've Lost It

by BrokenMisery   Sep 12, 2005


Tears weep from those solemn eyes,
A lost hope lays dormant in desolate cries,
Your soul is burning as you smell the smoke,
Digging for truth from the words you spoke.

And now you've lost it,
What it was that made you whole.
You've lost it,
The hunger now haunts your soul.
You've lost it,
Now everything makes you sad;
Because you've lost it,
You've lost all you ever had.

The monster grows inside your numb, brittle frame,
Knowing deep inside you will never be the same.
Watching the reflection in the mirror grow dark,
The emptiness consumes your shattered heart.

And now you've lost it,
What it was that made you whole.
You've lost it,
The hunger now haunts your soul.
You've lost it,
Now everything makes you sad;
Because you've lost it,
You've lost all you ever had.

Now it is gone, it is just too bad,
That you've lost all you ever had...

*again, I'm testing my style, its not great, but I'm practicing with writing lyrics*

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  • 18 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Pretty good, Not as good as your other ones. Not really a fan of repetitive parts. Keep it up

  • 18 years ago

    by Kurt

    If that wasn't good enough for you i wouldn't mind having that knid of skill. It was wonderful. You really do a great job and i hope you keep writing because i always find myself to want to read more. ANyway it was a great job and keep writing!!

  • 18 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    Oh I see these are lyrics, yes? They should be interesting put to music.

    I liked the first and third stanzas (especially the first). Your use of language gave great images.

    In the repeated part there is a line which doesn't seem to make sense to me.
    "What is was that made you whole"
    I think you may have meant "What IT was that made you whole."

    The final two lines gave a strong ending too.

    Good write, keep it up!