Best Wishes

by Soft Rain   Oct 7, 2005


I chronicled your eye's movement
oh how beautiful, they shined
and remembering back to when
forever you'd say wed last.

Now we are older and we know
that things that come will always go
and that forever we are friends
till death takes us both away.

Although there's
nothing else to do
inside of me
i die for you.

Wishing to hear you say
how you love me too
and that we could escape
to a place far away.

All you can do
is stare at me
it sure is too late
when you are married
and w/ a child on the way.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Gem

    "Wishing to hear you say
    how you love me too
    and that we could escape
    to a place far away"

    This stanza seems almost magical, i think at one point everyone wants to take their love one and vanish somewhere, even if it's only for a little while.
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 18 years ago

    by Jacklyn

    I like the first two stanza's but the last one kind of ruined the flow and it took the poem to a different ending then the reader thought it would. i though you could end it better then that. the first two brought promise and uncertainty but the last one, i don't know it was just weaker and then jsut suddenly ended.

    but the first two were good. keep up the work!

    ~Jacklyn

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