This was very good. I like when short poems have just as much emotion as a long one. Good job! One minor grammatical flaw:

"Your perfect smile frozes my tears,"

I think you mean freezes* instead of frozes. My fav. stanza was:

"You're my cruel angel of the night,
You with her, that's the harmful sight,
When I see you two holding hands,
My heart turns into crumbling sand."

Beautiful words... well put together!
Love always,
~BJ~

Hey there, good poem but is "frozes" a word? lol shouldnt it be freezes or seomthing? and the first 2 lines didnt rhyme. but good idea and style. fix it up in those ways and it will be even more amazing than it already is!

I normally dont like short poems but it was good and had a nice flow and it wasn't rushed so 5/5

I sense a lot of jealousy in this poem of honest emotion. the poem flowed nicely great job

Great job. very good poem. well done. take care. 5/5.

Wow, great job! I loved it, well done.

5/5

Saiya

The 2nd Stanza was really good. Well Done

Yes, the words were beautiful, although, perhaps it could have been longer.

Good Writing!
beth

I love this. so many people can relate to this. this poem is wonderful im going through a very similar situation right now so this is comforting great job!! 5/5 loved the rhymes and flow amazing

I love this poem. Especially the first stanza. It's so delicate pointing out small details on someone shows how much you care. Then later showing the hurt it causes...beautiful poem. 5/5

Gabriela:

Este poema es maravilloso. Supongo que hablas español... En fin, this poem was truly wonderful, and enjoyable. The diction is fantastic and precise, as is the structure, and the imagery. Well done indeed. This is truly a work of art.

I know how that feels. 5/5

I loved it great job!!!!! Thanx for commenting on my poem i really apprciate it alot!!!!!! Plz check out more of my poems and promise to do the same!!!! Thanx agian!!!!! Plz comment Joclyn

Good poem
creative
deep
intense
5/5
love
amy

Wow nice flow!!! great poem!!! Keep up the good work!!!! beautiful innovative imagination!!!!! I love it
5/5 ^_^

Awesome poem and i can totally realte to every part
nice flow and awesome use of words
take care

Great emotions and descriptions

~Take your angel wings far away,
So I won't hate each and every day.

~My favorite line

Wow....
Very unique... i liked it alot. 5/5
Very well written, great use of words.

Thanks for your comment, i really appreciate it.

xxx cici xxx

Very well written! Keep writing, its very unique. =)