by Syn Nov 15, 2005
category :
Life, society /
other
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I love God, its easy to see, |
by Marjan
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Hey David, |
by Vickie
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The poem is very nice yet is it also unclear in the beginning you say "us" yet in ht end you say "you two" so who exactly are you taking about you and someone or someone and someone else. The only thing I can think tis that you are still quoting God and if that is the case it should still be in "quotes" |
by Lenny
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Thanks, i like your poem it has a subtle rhyme that seems like it doesnt need to be there but is worked in with a very crafted style. |
by Syn
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Aww!... aww.. what...? |
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Aww! |