Damn
thats sad!!
thats so intense
great job
i lvoe it
5/5

Great job. That's so sad. I hope that it's not a true poem, but if it is im very sorry. Keep up the good work!

This is a really sad poem!!! I love it!

Tiffany.xox.

Awe... i can almost feel the hurt in your words... you did a wonderful job writing this and its so emotional... thats what makes it amazing... keep it up

sammie

This is such a good poem. The topic is so hard to write about but you did a great job.
Flow and rhyme are good too.
~~Sweetie

I like how there is such a child like qualiity i could imagine a little girl saying that and its so powerful. 5/5 forsure!

I hope it's not about you.... I cried when I read this one, I swear....
Your so good... Your poems so strong..5/5

Another sweet cute and sad poem...your sooo good! keep it up!
xxx
plz r/r/c mine too.thanx!

Wow that was very well written...Its was very sad too...Keep on writing....You are doing very well 5/5

OMFG, That was AMAZING!!!!! Holy WOW!!! You really put emotion into that! I just about cried... That's So sad... GREAT poem! 5/5 and NOTHING less! You are an amazing poet!!!!!!! The flow was sensational!!!! And The rhymes weren't cliché at all! Keep up the great work!!!

~BJ~

Omg hun:'(
that really reaches to me because ive felt it before..if that makes sense.
Great poem the emotion through that was heartwrenching.
Keep writing
xoxo

This is great poem it was kind of confusing but then i got it. i hope this didn't happen to you and if it did i'm so sorry+_+ ok chica keep up the good work.
oh yeah and if you don't know CHICA means girl. ok

...... very touching.

Wow i had like flashbacks, this poem is really intense and really good, it keeps you like locked in till the end

lots of love
*~*Becky*~*

That is deep and sad but it has more then one meaning to me anyway. you are speaking of the child and the father they both are confused to me.

love it.,
heather

Your poem is extremely sad very deep

That was so beautiful!!! I really loved the emotion in it! Only pointers I can give is… try not to use simple rhymes such as (Me, be, see, do, to, you) u see them everywhere. If u get some rhymes that u don’t normally see… u can tell that the writer put time and thought into the poem. I am so happy that u used periods and commas =D it gave ur poem a rhythm, and I could tell when the sentences stopped. Other tip is to organize your poem… it makes it look very nice, what I mean when I say that is this:

Where are you, Daddy?
I can't find you.
I just see this man yelling at me,
And telling me what to do.

What's wrong, Daddy?
You're not acting like yourself.
Is there anything I can do?
Anything to help?

Where's Mommy, Daddy?
I miss her so much.
I came home from school hungry today,
Because you didn't pack my lunch.

Other then that… it was awesome!

~Megan~

Wow, that's deep. 5/5 keep up the good work.

Woah, That was really good, the emotion was so intense, god your talented, keep writing..I love it. P.S: if you can check out some of my poems.
-5/5 xox

Wow, very expressive and sad. i know lots of children suffering from abuse from their parents. great work! ;D 5/5 and thanks for commenting on one of my poems!