Grant Me This Wish

by Void   Dec 18, 2005


Just one simple wish,
The wish for loves eternal bliss.
For my lonely soul to be complete,
When you fill in that missing piece.

To burn the flame of true love's fire
To fullfill,discretely, inner most desires.
To make unbroken the scars of my heart,
When with just your name, you leave your mark.

Bring back my reason to out live the moon
Grant me the wish that you'll be with me soon.
To fix the shattered shell I am,
To heal with love as best you can.

Turn to reality, the dream that I see.
Where I'm with you, and your with me.
The day you plant your lips for a kiss.
You will grant this one simple wish.

-I love you Paul.-

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  • 18 years ago

    by Lady Vengeance

    Pretty great, but i still like the one you entered in the comp better.
    well written. Rock on,
    Suzie

  • 18 years ago

    by Tim Bradshaw

    The last stanza was my favorite. It made me want to read it again. You show so much passion in your writing. Also you seem to make evrything so perfect; the flow the words the everything 5/5 all the way

  • 18 years ago

    by Carmen

    Amazing job. the only thing i can find wrong is this last two lines: The day you plant your lips for a kiss.
    You will grant this one simple wish.
    It seems so forced, about planting your lips. even if you switch kiss and lips around, or word it differently, lips and wish sound kinda alike so it'd sound more natural. otherwise amazing poem. loved it 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by swill

    Wowwww babe i loved the last verse...it is soo amazingly written...
    as they say...a poem from the heart never goes wrong...
    you know what...i love your comments...they really make me smile....
    and wow...*whispers* is that you in the display picture? youre *hush* beautiful.

    take care
    xoxoDhavaloxox

  • 18 years ago

    by Dean Russell-Rands

    OH GOLLY - that was brilliant. It had a ice flow and technique which I thoroughly enjoyed. 5/5 =)

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