My new world

"Monkey's dancing in my face,"
I don't like and can't understand this line.

"Ans soon I'll be trapped inside."

I think you meant "And".

The rest of the poem is excellent.

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Some brilliant descriptions and imagery anthony, you certainly have a lot of talent for a boy so young, well done to you, your emotions poured like waterfalls throughout this poem, each stanza flowed beautifully if not scarily, you wrote this incredibly well,

"Monkey's dancing in my face,
while my heart beats fast.
Screaming for the world to help,
Will someone come at last?"

This stanza to me was just brilliant!
I also loved the way you ended it, all in all well done!
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Wow thats a really good poem. i like it.

Wow, that was great! I definately understand why you won this category. I hope to see some more from you! Keep it up! :)

GR8t poim tons of emotion! IT gives new outlooks! keep writin you've got a gr8t talent!