When

by Jackie Marie   Dec 23, 2005


The rain is falling
Down on me
Trying to freeze me
When my heart
Is already cold

People walk all over me
As if I am the dirt
Beneath their feet
When I am already
Broken in a million pieces

You try to rip out my heart
So I will break down
Once more
When my heart is already
Shattered into tiny pieces

Making me cry
Until there is no more
Tears to be wasted
When I have already
Cried a huge river for you

Trying to close off the light
So I can no longer see
In this world of mine
When I am already living
In a pitch black room

© 2005 Jay Marie

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  • 17 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    Wonderfully written. Full of powerfull imagery and strong emotion. gret piece

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Great poem. its written extremly well and is full of emotion

  • 18 years ago

    by nobody truly knows me

    Wow, i loved it! excellent poem, 5/5. it had lots of emotion in it. keep up the good work.
    **lisa**

  • 18 years ago

    by Truest Lies

    Very strong.
    I liked the way you phrased it, like trying to die, and I'm already dead sort of poetry, I like that!

    Good Writing!
    beth

  • 18 years ago

    by xXMyThanatosXx

    I'm not the best judge of poetry... I like this poem a lot, meaning is quite strong, though a bit jagged in its wording. You seem like a very sad girl. and I stick with saying you need a good friend more then you need a partner (aka boyfriend)