Why Her?

Really strong poem and very well written! I really loved the last stanza! It was amazing! The only part which i found didn't quite work so well is:

"It's always just her
She just so good
I'll now explain
The way it should "

I don't know why, it just doesn't flow..... Maybe you could say something like:

"It's just always her,
Only because she seems pretty.
But let me explain,
The way it should be."

I dunno just a suggestion! =) Overal though this poem is wonderful and very well written! Keep up the awesome work! 5/5
~Luvz~
~Angie~
xoxo

That was really strong ur very talented and i wish i was half the writer u r, stay strong

peace ^_^
@my

I'm back Claire, to actually comment on the poem this time, because that seemed to slip my mind before...

Okay, i really really like it, especially the last verse. I think you finish it off really well, and i love the way you ended with a rhetorical question! *claps*

But, just one thing babe:
"She takes the guys she likes
When you like them too
She doesn't even care
What it'll do to you"

For some reason i don't like the wording of the last line. It may just be a weird thing that i have but for some reason i think it would sound better like "What it does to you", just for the rhythm. But i'm just weird about rhythm-things so just ignore this if you want to, okay beautiful?

Bye bye Claire,
xox,
Porter.

Hey my beautiful, it's Porter :)

You gotta get your butt online and explain this too me, coz i know exactly who you're talking about but i didn't know she had taken anyone from you... i'll talk to you soon, i really want to find out...

Bye bye my sweetie,
xx, Porter.

Yeah everyone can see the sorrow she felt but she didnt care how much she screwed my life up and she's done this before many times to many of my friends. so i thought its my right to let ppl now how wacked out she is