I really liked this poem. when it first started out, it seemed happy, but like u said got sad. i would of myself, put this poem in "poems about life" because it is a thing of life to feel this way, and even though u may think that this feeling will stay and that when other say itll pass, it isnt true, it really actually is, because everything in life happens for a reason, and it makes us who we are today. a stronger person, who in the end can make it out happier than when they went in. i think that if u need help or advice, you should definitely ask for it and dont be ashamed. everyone in life needs help and one point or another. thats why u always have friends to help you through life. and if u ever need help but dont want to ask them , im always here. i really enjoyed your poem and hope that soon you are happy again, and that the life u think you dont have, becomes yours.. to be honest, i think it already is. its just hidden and you have to realize it... it reminds me of my poem "the perfect sleep" it is in a different sort of explanation, but gets across the point that you may think something isnt there, but really it is, you just have to want it enough, and be able to believe in it, for it to really happen. check it out of you want. its a bit long, but i think you might enjoy it .

Oh u poor girl! (hugs) I'm so sorry to hear how u feel! No 1 should feel like this....I hope everything will go ur way....great poem....(sniff)

Yep, understand it, very clearly, yep, everything is always gonna be fine, that's what they always say, that's what I always say, well, it will, I think, hmm, either way, good poem...5/5

I love how you made this poem flow so much, like there's no "bumps" in the poem.
Great work.

Very deep and sad....5/5 i like it

Really well ecpressed and great low thoughout

5/5

Fantastic poem. your words are very strong. brilliantly expressed, it flowed beautifully. i completely understand this poem.

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This poem wasn't perfect; no poem is. i suppose that's why i loved it so much. it was something i can identify with- feeling like you're trying to be happy but feeling worse, not being able to explain or not wanting to because people won't understand. To me your poem wasn't about being unhappy, it was about how you feel about not being happy. confusing, but its my theory :) anyways... enough of my rambling. i love this, stay strong- i can teel from your words that you're stronger than i will ever be

abbi x

Heyyy :)

Great poem :) You wrote this poem really well. It flowed beautifully and had loads of emotion in it. I give you a 5 :)
Take care now,
Rachelxx

It's the right title/category :)

yeah. the world seems so useless sometimes, and when you set ur mind straight then u wont listen to anyone. i try to forget when i did that, but when u r depressed, u become so blind to the world around you and just stay a shadow. the truth is that the world loves you and the people that hurt you in this world are ones in gazillions. Don't ever feel like you can't talk to anyone, because almost everyone will listens, but they'll make different comments at the end. just find someone u can trust...b/c the world is an open book, and u need to start writing ur story.

Yeah the title fits the poem. I really liked it and could relate to it. The flow and world choice was great. You can tell you had a lot of feeling in it. I liked it when you said how they always say its gonna be alright and how the feeling will just pass. I gave your poem a 5. Thanks for your comment. =)

Thanks For Commenting on my poem I thought I'd return the favor... that was a really good poem and I could relate to it and it was easy to understand good job!

Excellent!

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I understood it and loved it. it was powerful and just made me think i loved it. nice work.
Emma

Such a great poem good job keep writing and take care hun sarah x

Wow, I'm so impressed. You're so young, yet you have a way with words. Great job. 5/5 Keep on writing

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~ Tina

Wow I Loved This Poem! Its Great And I Think Everything Is Fine About It! Thanks For The Advice On My Poem I Appreciate It! I've Never Done Poetry In A Class Or Anything So I Dont Know Much About It So I Just Try To Write It The Best Way I Can I Was Hoping To Take A Poetry Class Next Year But They Cancelled It So I Dunno, I Cant Really Show My Poems To Any English Teachers Because They Will Think Im Suicidal And Stuff So Any Help I Can Get Is Appreciated Thanks If You Ever Need Someone To Talk To Or If You Just Want To Talk To Me You Can Always Email Me At XodecembershhoX@yahoo.com Or If You Have Aim My Sn Is
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I like it good job it is wonderful keep it up you are talented

Im not sure about the title, but the catagory is perfect!!
Really interesting poem! I enjoyed reading it. Somehow the rhythm seemed a bit off though, but maybe thats just me:)
Anyways your a really good writer!! Keep it up!!!