Nice, I agree ^^ the reader is always desperate to read the next section, as soon as they finish the first. . . that's a hard skill to learn, or master - or even knowin the first place! Excellent poem, loved it.
Your poem is wonderful! You had my attention on edge the whole way through! A tuff skill to learn might I add! My only idea for this poem is that you try not to use so man FULL sentances in each line... It kind of throughs it off a bit. In other words you don't need all the filler words like "THAT, and," Stuff like that! It might make the poem read more smoothly. But other than the reading smoothly you have everything else to perfection!! 5/5 Your an amazing writter
Wow I know exactally what you mean.. if you loved someone you would do anything for them even move mountains.. and if it wasnt possible you would find a way. Interesting job. I really liked how it didnt have any sort of rhyme scheme, because it made the emotion that much stronger and intense. I loved it every image was stronger than the next and it made me feel powerful. Nice job.