Comments : Fate. ... that was never meant to be...

  • 15 years ago

    by Tammi

    This is very good I love it and I understand it very much so keep up the good work 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Juls

    Great work. I like it. Keep writing you are good at it


  • 15 years ago

    by Katie

    Its really good...makes you think too

  • 15 years ago

    by LostHopesCrimsonTears

    Good work here! It really makes you think! Keep it up!

    also, thnx for the comment :)

    *~peace and love~*

    *~Amanda Hope~*

  • 15 years ago

    by Synh

    Such truth in this poem. One of my favorites.

  • 15 years ago

    by Unforgiven Retniap doolb

    I liked this one it came out good. It did not keep me interested the whole time but ended good.

  • 15 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Wonderfully written, keeps the reader interested. good job. Keep up the amazing work.

  • 15 years ago

    by Sole

    Nice, I agree ^^ the reader is always desperate to read the next section, as soon as they finish the first. . . that's a hard skill to learn, or master - or even knowin the first place! Excellent poem, loved it.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 15 years ago

    by Cayce

    Excellent! This is my favorite one of your that i've read do far. It flowec nicely and kept me wanting more the whole time. Great job! 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Brigitte

    Your poem is wonderful! You had my attention on edge the whole way through! A tuff skill to learn might I add! My only idea for this poem is that you try not to use so man FULL sentances in each line... It kind of throughs it off a bit. In other words you don't need all the filler words like "THAT, and," Stuff like that! It might make the poem read more smoothly. But other than the reading smoothly you have everything else to perfection!! 5/5 Your an amazing writter

  • 15 years ago

    by Jessica

    Wow.. this really made me think, good job! this really kept me on the edge of my chair the whole time! flowed well and good emotion, nice job!

  • 15 years ago

    by UnToLd TrUtH

    Wow this is just great. I loved this poem and it is so true about what you wrote. 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I liked this, I thought that the wording and imagery were wonderfully done.
    The emotion behind the words written are clear for all to see.
    I think you did an excellent job with this.

  • 14 years ago

    by Jenni

    You are a very good poet. There is not much free verse that I find to be written so wonderfully. This poem had such strong emotions and you portrayed them so passionately. wonderful! 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    This seemed to be more of a speech than a poem to me... It had a very nice message to it, but I feel as though rhyming could've helped it seem more... poem-like. 4/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow I know exactally what you mean.. if you loved someone you would do anything for them even move mountains.. and if it wasnt possible you would find a way. Interesting job. I really liked how it didnt have any sort of rhyme scheme, because it made the emotion that much stronger and intense. I loved it every image was stronger than the next and it made me feel powerful. Nice job.

  • 14 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    ITs easy to understand exactly what your
    talking about
    i love it because its powerful
    and there is alot
    of emotion in it
    i also liked
    the imagery
    good job