Night's Wave

by Momentary Relapse   Jan 27, 2006


A wave comes crashing to the shore
Spreading over the glittering sand
Hanging in the horizon gleaming red
Is the sun dying as night comes
Every breath slips into darkness
Retreating back into the night sky
Understanding life returns with the wave
As it ends once more with the day
A gentle breeze smothers the dark
The waves moving away from the land
Slipping back into the desolate calm
Where the ocean forever reigns

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  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    I really like this one, it is short but still very powerful, you created effective atmosphere with just a few words and rhythm of this piece is great. Well done!

  • 16 years ago

    by Jacqui Armstrong

    =D loved it!
    well done an amazing poem!
    keep up the hard work!

    Love
    Jacs
    xxxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    I really enjoyed this poem. I love the imagery in nature poems, you did an excelent job in it. I liked your description in this, "glitering sand" creates this really cool imagery of a ceach and the glittering is glass and stuff like that. I liked how you described the sun as dying, this is a different way to describe how night is coming and the sun is setting. You really captured that beautiful image of the sun setting. An excellent job. To impr9ove i suggest you useo unctuation. Other then that a great read! Keep writing! xx

  • 18 years ago

    by The Poetic Child

    Excellnt poem..nice rhythm and flow..my suggestion would be that you could of done this poem in the Nature Category..5/5 great job
    ttyl sometime
    PeAcE
    ~The Poet~

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Very strong imergry and overall a fantastic eice

    5/5

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