Darkness Has Become Me

Hey, i really liked this. I found that your rhyming was a little odd to begin with but once i re-read it i thought it was quite good because it wasn't as though you were trying to force the poem to rhyme, making it less meaningful. If you're looking for critisism or ideas on how to improve this i would suggest the seconf stanza, purely for the reason i don't think it flows in the same way as the others but it does still work. I especially liked the final stanza because i think it ends it really well....i personally find it difficult to end poems appropriately. Definitely 5/5!

xoxox Charl xoxox

This is good...5/5

Well west, I give this poem a rating of 4. that was really good.
I think this sentence "Whiter than the snow upon the moons light"
was appropriate even though it may seem a simple not very important
sentence. because it helps the reader
to imagine the things you are talking
about.
and this one I really liked:
"My blood goes black as the night screams in fear." because you said
night screams and actually you gave
life to the night. you spoke about night
as if it was a human or sth. so, I think
that sentence was a reall poetic sentence. keep up the good job.
may you be happy,
marjan

I must say that the topic has made me quite off about the poem.

It was too cliche, the topic, but the content was amazing. Change the topic to capture more readers.

Wow i am amazed you have so much talent i cant wait till you write more

love always\
tabby