The voice within

by LockedInEternity   Feb 12, 2006


Piercing through the awkward silence,
The raspy voice I held within.
Looking for an exit,
Searching.
Putting goose bumps to my skin.

Tracing the outline,
Of my body.
The voice inside me,
Held too long.
I block it out,
Push it back in.
It seems my voice has grown too strong.

Heart rate increasing,
Noise level gaining.
My pulse is breaking,
Through my skin.
The voice inside of me,
Escaping.
The voice I speak of is within.

The thunder,
Soundless.
Waiting terror.
As if a demon breaking free.
There's something wrong,
The voice inside me,
Simply can't belong to me.

I hear it edging,
Not yet escaping.
So close,
Yet in a way,
So far.
The voice inside of me,
Its breaking,
And in the place of it a scar.

Tension is crazy,
The voice breaks free,
My mouth,
Controlled.
No sympathy.
A will so strong,
It shattered all,
That in it's way,
Happened to fall.

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  • 17 years ago

    by AnnMarie

    The flow was not really there, some stanzas long some short.........It makes it harder to read and keep a long with the poem.......The words also seemed a little forced, of course that would be the flow!!

    Good job,
    -AnnMarie

  • 17 years ago

    by Polly

    Woh I so love the last stanza:
    Tension is crazy,
    The voice breaks free,
    My mouth,
    Controlled.
    No sympathy.
    A will so strong,
    It shattered all,
    That in it's way,
    Happened to fall.

    It makes the poem so great! I thought the rhyme in the rest of it was a bit random though and could do with some work.

  • 17 years ago

    by Megann Lee

    It was a great poem, It might be cause I am slow or stupid, but the Ending threw me off just alittle, but I don't care still gave it a five. :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    Girl like i said, you got the talent i always tryu to write some poems about life,,, but it never works,, and well u are a good writter, and all your poems has feelings in them,,, they are heart felt and all,,,

    Keep it up!

  • 17 years ago

    by wdnest

    Hi there,
    Thanks for your reply on the discussion forum to my thread.

    I would like to use your poetry on my website at www.whitedovesnest.com. You can email me at whitedovesnest@hotmail.com. I think your poetry is fantastic, full of feeling and would be proud to show it on my site.

    Thanks
    WDNest.

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