Breaking the Ice

by Jacklyn   Feb 18, 2006


Examining the surface
of this water of stone
this ice which is transparent
standing between me and you

A watery solid vision
of what we may become
A stretched out far illusion
standing between us this thick wall

Eyes glaring in one direction
meeting your ice blue love
stares fixed upon each other
A barrier keeping us apart

Sharing the same temptations
running with desire and lust
Yet our dreams freeze the thoughts
building a wall we can't break through

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  • 17 years ago

    by Soft Rain

    I loved your poem and I am back hope to hear from you again

  • 18 years ago

    by Soft Rain

    Great poem did ya miss me?

  • 18 years ago

    by Shædow Poet

    Very nice metaphor... It not only shows the mental block between two people, but the icy, cold interaction between the two.
    Perhaps these two can light the ice with their desire...
    Anyways, I like this because it's not a typical love poem! Plus, the title is very attractive. :-)

  • 18 years ago

    by Ariana

    This sounds quiet bittersweet to me and it was really effective and has alot of impact, I really liked your choice of words cause they fit in well with the whole idea of the poem. I think I can relate to parts of what you're saying, so in a sense you have put my feelings and thoughts into words! Very nice piece, well done :)

  • 18 years ago

    by JJ

    You obviously can write about "love" Beautiful job! *tears*

    PS. I'll e-mail you from time to time....never stop writing and I'll always remember you girl :) continue inspiring!

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