Void (Rictameter)

by Ariana   Feb 19, 2006


Void (Rictameter)

This void.
Is draining me
I'm watching myself fall
Tumbling down into nothing
but a tangled heap of my wasted dreams.
Crumbling down into nothing.
I don't feel anymore.
all I see is -
this void.

My first try at this :)

syllables per line - 2/4/6/8/10/8/6/4/2

The first and last lines are the same.

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  • 18 years ago

    by HansRik

    This is a wonderful poem, Ariana.

    The style is difficult to master, but you have certainly done so craftfully and elegantly. I like the use of diction, and the efficiency of the imagery. Well done.

  • 18 years ago

    by TormentedSoul

    Well for a first try i think you did really good in the pattern and the poem was good too. Great job!

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