Unexplained Feelings

by **Just Her**   Jan 18, 2004


I sit her alone, thinking about life
All the pain I’m feeling, the strife
I wish I knew what was wrong with me
The way I live is fine, so why am I in misery
I want someone to understand
Sit beside me and take my hand
But I don’t feel the comfort anymore
The hurt just increases, worse then before
Maybe it’s because I feel left behind
Like I can’t catch up, but neither can I hide
Maybe its because I can’t find a place to stay
I’m lost in the world, left a stray
I need someone to lend a shoulder, hold my tears
Listen to my words truly lend their ears
Please save me, please come here
Because I may not be around, if someone isn’t near

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  • 17 years ago

    by Bret Higgins

    Ok, first thing to do is edit this, remove the question marks that the server added, properly punctuate the poem and correct the simple spelling mistakes. For example:

    The hurt just increases, worse than before

    This will look, sound and feel better like this:

    The hurt just increases, it's worse than before!

    You're not following a set meter so addition and subtraction of words is easy to do.

    I say this lot, but this is a solid first draft upon which you can build. Get to it!

  • 20 years ago

    by **Just Her**

    thanks for the reviews guys..... im starting to do a lil better, im just trying to think positive.. if u wanna email me feel free cr8zy28@hotmail.com... thanks... keep the comments coming n thanks for the support

  • 20 years ago

    by Michelle

    I have a brther that committed suicide...please...your life is worth so much more than that...email me if u like micellemybelle727@yahoo.com i'll be glad to help however i can....great poem..up til the end...:( michelle...take care