Pain, oh goddess love that is so difficult and a long hard road to go through. I have been there, and still am going through that. Closure is nessesary, so get that between you and the love you lost. End it on a enjoy your life and maybe we can be friends type of thing b/c being friends can help ease the pain. It is hard hun, but life is there for you to live, you can't let it go to waste without a fight. *hugs* Something else I found, often turning around and helping others in their lives can help ease the pain in your own life or put it into prospective. Best to you hun! *hugs!*

-Tainted Mikochan

Now about that poem, I am religeous so it was nice to have a poem to read along those lines. I did like this poem and how you began talking about the "Red Death," and then connecting it to being hell. I really thought it was a nice peace of work.

-Tainted Mikochan

Wow... very original!! brilliant work, as always. take care,
-xXx-

A brilliantly original poem with a different take on hell. I love how you've classified this as a life poem rather than a dark one. It shows how hell is just part of the circle of life
Well Done

All the Best
Sondos

I love this. its amazing.

I didnt really understand it the first time i read it so i read it again and it all clicked, thats the sign of good poem, right?

well done xx

Normally I'm not all that fond of religious stuff, but this was good. Rhyming was good and the repetition of "The Red Death" gave a vivid image. There was something lacking from the poem, I think, however I'm having trouble placing what it is. Maybe more grasping words could have been used? Anyway good job. Keep writing.

This is good. I liked the line 'Slowly overcoming the un-innocent'. I think the term un-innocent is very powerful. The poem is a little difficult to follow but rhythm seems deliberate and in a way it does work. Nice poem.

A few of the rhymes were a bit forced, but '5' is not 'perfect,' it's 'excellent.' And so this poem was, most of the rhymes were very good and I was able to catch the flow. Good message, too.

Wow this is good, Great work 5/5

natz x0x

Oh dear...is is an excellent poem.

It started out pretty weak, but the ending is what matter most and it was splendid!

"And if innocence is what you sell,"

I love this particular line.

~Atomic

Wow... nicely done! Loved the flow and style of this poem... Great write! Keep writing... 5/5

Awesome sauce dude, we all know I love darkness. Good job I liked the flow, and I loved the word use.

Very ncely done original and and strong message again ver well done ALLY

Great poem - complex meaning and a great rhyme scheme. Keep it up :)

Peace. [Sole]

I really liked the flow and the feeling the poem gives me. I think you expressed yourself very well. I guess maybe I would understand even more f I was religious, but good job anyways :p

-kelsie

Very deep and original poem, so emoational!! Some how it touched my heart and left me thinking =0) I loved the flow and the message in the poem...Great job, amazing!!!

Much Love Sabrina

Loved it - was pretty frightening - very clever =]

Outstanding poem with a powerful message

I really like this. It gives a clear message withought any complexity. Great work!