My own little world

Wow, really great one here!! only thing id suggest to make it flow better is making the lines...

"my own little world it is black
my own little world i feel under attack"

to

"In my own little world Im surrounded by black
In my own little world I feel under attack"

thats just a suggestion though.. anyways... good job!

I really like the concept & meaning behind this poem. Great job! 5/5*

This is such a good poem

i feel the same way at times..
keep strong, we'll live through it all

i really can't explain it. but i like it a lot.

Great poem.. Definitly deserves a five..

I like how you added that big cliffhanger. You made it sound happy at the begining then sad at the end