As the Clock Ticks

by Brigitte   Mar 14, 2006


Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock
The seconds are passing by
Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock
Soon my heart will surely die.

Do you remember the days,
We happily shared together,
Something that was once supposed to last forever?
I guess it was just another one of my love crazes.

Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock
My body is slowly growing weaker
Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock
But I refuse to die until I get what I seek.

Tell me once more,
How much you truly love me,
Open my hearts eyes so that it may see.
Make my heart strengthen again, down to the very core!

Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock
Hurry my dear
Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock
I'm running out of tears!

Remember how it was before,
Back when dreams were reality!
Our lives have turned much too surreal
Every little thing has become a chore.

Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock
I guess there's really no use delaying,
Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock
My heart can just Finish decaying.

It's obvious now,
That you really don't care,
This is almost too much to bare!
So I'll just take my last bow.

Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock
But just know what you passed up,
Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock
Someone who would hold your hand until your heart stopped.

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  • 18 years ago

    by glass*wall*prison

    Wonderful write
    lovley rythm
    liked the repetition
    flow was off a lil

    ~GLASS~

  • 18 years ago

    by Fallen~Tears

    Nice job.. My favorite part in it is this line

    How much you truly love me,
    Open my hearts eyes so that it may see

    I dont know why i guess ive never heard the term "my hearts eyes".. anyways excellent job keep it up!!

    ~!*FallenTears~!*
    ~!*Meaghen~!*

  • 18 years ago

    by Sole

    Sad. I can only imagine how horrible that must be. I've waited on calls before. But that wasn't the most important call of my life I must admit. The repeptition was good, one mistake.

    My heart can just Finnish decaying

    Finish only has one N in it - you may want to remove the second :)

    Really nice write, a little sad, but the flow was good and the tick, tock, tick, tock, really brought in a good rhythm.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 18 years ago

    by azlan26

    You may want to sort out the characters in this poem as some of them are a bit messy
    But the poem itself, I know everyone says this but I do really understand what you are going on about. The last line was perfect and the use of 'Tick tock' well I did that in one of my own poems a while back!
    Great job :)

  • 18 years ago

    by SilentDreams

    Nice poem...I liked the use of repetition...I'm guessing you write your poems in word then paste them onto the site and use spell check because there are a few mistakes the but otherwise a good read.

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