"It's sad that pains and aches,
hurt you more when you're old."
that line makes me really sad when i think about it...but it was a good poem
5/5

I really loved how this poem flowed! It was really good! Very story veiws on the world! Great job! You are very talented! 5/5!

An insightful, moving poem. I'm not American so I may not necessarily get the full impact but it's not that tough to relate. You write intelligently, and the poem flows and rhymes so well that it's a pleasure to read. These things have already been said countless times but seem refreshing when put across in such a striking poem... I will stop ranting now. Impressed. 5/5

Great write. I love how you went from a common person's perspective to a global perspective. Kept the rhyme scheme going throughout and the flow was great. Keep up the great work... keep writing. 5/5

Well written, alot of truth and observation. It flowed nicely.... the last stanza could have either, be elaborated and made into two, or focused more on the ending statement to help tie it up better. all in all good job, just that last stanza, if fixed, could make it alot stronger.

Very political, I live in England, so I won't delve into the meaning - but I thought the rhyming and flow was excellent, and not at all forced. Really well written.

Peace. [Sole]

As truthful as your poem is I would hope to have a better view of the future. If no one dreams big, then there wouldn't be any new big ideas and nothing would ever get done. I don't know, I guess I just don't want to give up on the world yet. But yes, all the things you mentioned are definately sad.

-Tainted

Quite an insightful message, I enjoyed this immensely.
It was a bit repetitive, but in a sense it just re-inforced your thoughts.
Oh and the word pedafiles should be spelled pedophiles.
Take care and keep it up~Holly
Oh and check out the discussion board within the club :)

Very true

Loved this poem!!! Couldn change a thing!! I have to disagree with Rach i like it better the way u wrote it!!! This is my fav stanza:

It's sad that one mistake,
can put the future on hold.
It's sad that pains and aches,
hurt you more when you're old

Very good!!

That was very will written & everything in it was true. The repetition of "It's sad" really held up.. much better than some others I have read with that sort of repetition. You did a great job on this at expressing your views & thoughts. Great job!

I kno..so sad:( very gr8 poem i have enjoyed ur work very much!:)

Very good poem, I especially agree with the last stanza

This is a great poem keep up the good work email me at tinkerbella_91@yahoo.com