Angel of the Ivory Keys

"Sitting tall and proud"
It really seems ... too simple . Like overused kind of [not in the poem , like with other poems too] . Maybe find other ways to describe that .

"While her slender body sticks to the seat"
'Sticks' kind of sounds weird to me . In a way, I feel like it doesn`t fit into the poem . Like the vocabulary choice & that word just don`t ... I don`t know how to explain it .

I feel like you should work on it a bit more . Maybe some slight revising and editing ? Other than that, I really have no negative things to say . I like the repitition (sp?) . Most of the time, people try to do that and it just doesn`t work . But you made it fly with the poem .
..__MiNDYY

Did you happen to know this is called a Kyrielle poem? Just wondering if you knew. Lol. Well, I must say this is one wonderful poem! I liked the flow of the poem and the rhyming scheme was perfect. You stuck to the same rhyming pattern. It bugs me when people jump from an aabb to an abab or abcb or abcd. Lol. It gets annoying. Well beautiful poem! God Bless 5/5
<3Tayyyy

Very well done! I like that you repeated "The angel of ivory keys"...I do, however agree with most of what "Tamborineman" had to say.. He pretty much summed it all up in his comment.. I still think it was great hough and deserves a 5/5
Tyanna

I really enjoyed this poem. I thought it was very well written. Great job. The flow was really nice. 5/5

~Chelsea

Interesting poem, I like the title and material.

Line 1: 'sitting tall and proud' seems repetitive. The term "sitting tall" denotes pride. Perhaps another word would add more description to the pianist.

Line 5: 'sending' isn't very descriptive. I think you could find another word that would elicit stronger emotions

Line 6 confuses me. I don't see how it fits or transitions.

Line 10: 'sticks' - again, I believe you could come up with a better word. Sticks sounds... out of place - ie. "holds fast to the seat?"

Line 11: I like the adjective, 'wooden' but I think if you use more detail describing the wood it would be better. "oaken majesty"? I dunno. Just a suggestion, I do like this line.

Overall it seems well written. However, I'd say your biggest problem is the 'ing' words. Using active voice would draw the reader in much more effectively and give a more immediate sense of time and location.

Hope this is helpful and not just critical