Cardboard Guitar

*wordless* I don't know what to say. This was very nicely writen and the ending showed so much emotion that I nearly fell over in aw. I loved how the ending showed a slight bit of hate. I don't know if that was meant to be, but I love it regardless.
One thing though. I read your other poem and you said that it was true. Please, don't make this poem reality!
Keep it up, 5/5

Hatori
The Illusionist

I loved the use of the question at the end, i think that was really effective because it actually makes you think about the content of the poem. little bits of this seemed to disruppt the flow, but other than that really imaginative and emotional, i loved the title, pure genius :D

Good write. the glock line kind of interupts the flow of that stanza, but makes you stop and think at the same time. ryhmes arent very forced but simple. good. id say the last stanza did the best in my eyes. :you happy now that im not around? '
good line

Tom

Ohh, nice. I think I've read this one be for. Anyway. Awsome, the end made me shivver. 5/5

Never mind Joe he seems to have removed them now . I told him he also plagerized a few others, so he removed them all.....
Yahhh 1 more plagerizer taught a lesson...