Your Look Cuts Deep

Wow that was just so hauntingly real, it brought a tear to my eye, especially the last section which was so urgent and so true, i can so understand your work and it's all amazing!!
5/5 def!!

Hey Thanks bunches for the comment.... i love this poem of yours... and some of yours i can get where you are coming from and relate to them too... im just really getting good at this too... i started writing years ago but some of them are really bad but im still workin on it all... but yours are excellent....

That was such a sad poem. the repetition and the occasional striking rhyme that catched, surrounded by all the chaotic raw emotion. it has a sort of solemn pain to it. really bautiful writing.
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This is a good poem! I think u r really doing good for just starting to write poems! I am a starter and I dont think I am very good ethier! But everybody tells me I am! U should check out my poems! 5/5 hehe

That was an excellent poem. The final stanza is especially striking. I really enjoyed reading this, all the way through the poem flows very gently, there seems to be little urgency about it and this helps to create a feeling of seduction, "Twirling around my little finger". But to end on such a vicious and rapid note was inpsired,
"Stabbing, tearing, ripping flesh
Bleeding, pouring, my hand of death
The pain surrounds
And I forget
The darkness comes
And I regret "
You complete break the pattern and it makes the whole thing all the more shocking and powerful. I really really loved this one, 5/5! x