by ♥broken fairytales♥ May 25, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
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I don't want to be the hurting one no more |
by J Lau
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Nicely done. Just a few minor things to correct... "there place" should be "their place"... "their actually doing" and "their causing" should be "they're actually doing" and "they're causing"... "trusing" should be "trusting". Sorry, don't mean to seem like picking apart your poem. Good write otherwise. |
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Oh my god baby this is beautiful, i thought everything was going well?!?!?! |
by firexflys
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Nice poem very good love the rhyme keep up the good work |
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Wow... |