Yearnings

by Resplendant Rose   May 26, 2006


Only one thing i needed
for only this i yearned
my prayers went unheeded
unread and returned

to be held by someone
patient loving and true
to whom i could run
i thought it was you

but apparently not
because you are gone
you conveniently forgot
your promise withdrawn

alone with nowhere to turn
i think of inducing my death
for now all i really yearn
is to feel my last breath

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  • 17 years ago

    by Melissa S. Masucci

    Same comment as I left on the last one about the capitalization.

    Also, two things. First, I really don't like the line "but apparently not". I think you could change that to something else and still get your point across - not sure what, but that line just bugs me. Second, the way the flow of the second stanza goes, I want to unconsciously add the word "that" to the last line to read "i thought [that] it was you". Just a thought.

    I like your poetic style. Not many people successfully and consistently rhyme every other line, but you pull it off well.

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    You had some really nice rhymes in this one. They didn't feel forced, it flowed well, and it was nothing too obviouos. Well chosen words. Really weird title though.

  • 17 years ago

    by Meggie33

    That was very good... i agree with her^^ *two thumbs up* - great job, i really liked it and felt what you were saying!

    **meggie**

  • 17 years ago

    by FrozenTearsBleed

    I loved this poem its really good, *two thumbs up*--- read mine sometime, your on my favorites now, great work!

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