You

by Turtle   Jun 1, 2006


We all need someone
To talk to in our life,
A friend who we can run to
In times of stress or strife.

A friend who\'s always there for you
A friend throughout the years
A friend we know will care
And take away our fears.

A friend who\'s always close
Waiting for our call,
To wipe away the tears we cry
And lift us when we fall.

A friend who loves you so
And on whom we can depend
To complete our every need
A precious loving friend

Lauren you are all of this
No matter what we go through
So I hope you\'ll understand it
When I say that I Love You.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Biscuit

    Aww, this is sweet, the rhyming is good though maybe u have repeated the word 'friend' a little too much.

    another tiny point is that uv changed the erm...i dno what to call it but what i mean is in some places u use plural pronouns (ie we, our, us etc) and others you have used singular pronouns (ie you)

    it is a bit confusin whilst reading the poem and i think u should aim to stick to either one or the other throughout the poem. it would be good to have the first four stanzas using plural (as in addressing your audience as a whole) so for example the second stanza would begin:

    A friend who's always there for us(instead of you)

    and then the last stanza as a singular in order to emphasise the message by addressing it directly to your friend. (which you have done already but it would be more evident if it was in contrast to the rest of the poem)

    hope that makes sense...

    all the best
    -biscuit-

  • 17 years ago

    by Sar

    Awww sooo sweet, really good
    i love it

  • 17 years ago

    by Derf K

    I'm sure Lauren would have loved this.
    This is great. A very down to earth friendship poem :_)

  • 17 years ago

    by holly

    I love this i simple but effective flows beautifully and i can feel the meaning behind it a great job :D

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    Aww.. that is so sweet! yet another great poem! it flowed perfectly without any glitches, good descriptions, and lots of emotion! great write! 5/5

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