The Other Side

(3rd line)
"Past" should be passed.

The poem isn't very original, I've heard a couple of those lines that you've written before in other writings as well as in books and preaching, story telling and pimp talk.

Over all I liked the whole idea of it though, you're an honorable young man and it's good you choose to be one.
To think about these things is only natural, but to write about it well is another thing. Everyone will know the answer to all of those questions once the time comes, but once it comes how will that person write about it?

Take this idea and dig into it, you haven't ruined the idea just yet, infact you've just started a good brainstorm.

I gave this a 4, good job.

Amazing! great thoughts on life :)
keep it up
~Sammi

ps Omg i sound so much like a teacher!

Great job this poem is so beautifully written. i really like the lines :
Will I be judged for what I have become?
Or is my fate based on who I once was?
it is a very bold and deep statment that ican relate to. amazing job, keep it up..smile*

Good very good

I like this poem very meaningful. Keep up the good work.