Comments : Death (a beautiful thing)

  • 10 years ago

    by DreamingOutLoud

    Wow. powerful ending love it

  • 8 years ago

    by Joseph Boadi

    This is a gud piece even though u sound a bit weird.lol.diction is gud.your imagery is worth it and ur rhymes cnt be predicted wich i very gud.keep writing dear u gud

  • 3 years ago

    by Little Silver Pen

    But when you die... when you are buried in the ground... you realize, there is no change. Change is one of the most important things; you can see new things everyday. In Death, there is no Change. In Life, Change visits almost all the time.

    • 3 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      I dont want change. I dont need change. I might like being burried in the ground..

  • 2 years ago

    by ddavidd

    I have tried it last month stayed in hospital for few weeks. I had to drop all my courses and am back in much worth situation. It does not work for me no more. It is like a temptation of an easy way out. But I know whenever I choose the easiest way I loose big time. I do not let my laziness get the best of me no more, no matter how difficult it may get. I like the language of this piece.

    • 2 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Ive tried death several times. I still consider it from time to time.. but its the depression that causes it.

  • 2 years ago

    by Lost One

    I've been there. Not underground but on its doorstep. When you're in that place, its like you are standing in front of a brick wall. You are too close to the problem. You are bruised and bleeding from trying to break through it, exhausted from trying to climb it, and not in the right state of mind to figure out a way around. I needed a helping hand of sorts, a friend to show me a way around the wall. Sure it was a longer trip, and there was pain along the way... but there was also laughter, smiles, and love. You ever need someone to vent to I'm all ears. No judgement, and no advice unless you ask for it.

  • 2 years ago

    by CJ Maleney

    There is always a reason for us to live
    It's too easy to give up and die.
    Lost love, friends or family
    "Yet you are still alive"

    The pain you feel inside consumes,
    But remember everything you love.
    Your time is not yet over,
    Your seat is not reserved above.

    So please continue breathing
    And let your fire burn
    I know that I would miss your words
    In this I'm not alone

    Craig

    • 2 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Thanks C :)
      this is quite an older piece... And I am hanging in here :)
      your comment alone could be apoem by the way! It was beautiful. Thank you for your kind words. xx

  • 2 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    A vibrant emotional piece beautifully written that echoes a question asked by .any at some time or an on other. You have an eloquent way with words

  • 2 years ago

    by Alec

    This is beautifully twisted. Love it. Its raw, and its the truth as you see it.

    Personally, I love change, new faces, places, partners... the more the merrier in more ways than one.
    ~Alec

  • 2 years ago

    by chandelier

    wow!
    i mean , I've always wanted to write something like this but couldn't get hold of the right words. You just nailed it :)

  • 2 years ago

    by Sai

    I think everyone is bound to go down this dark path at least once in their life. You have depicted these dark thoughts in a way that most people could connect with, myself included. Hopefully you dont feel these things anymore, that you've overcome these dark thoughts. I find that writing them down helps.

    • 2 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Thanks Sai. Im actually receiving constant help.

  • 2 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    I can so relate
    Keep writing
    All the very best.