Promises, Promises

Yet again you amaze me, i'll make sure to read more of your poems once I get more time.

I'd like to apologize for answering you so late though, been uhm lets call it busy.

I know how it feels to be depressed, and I noticed that the majority of your beautiful poems are sad poems or the likes, should you ever need someone to talk to then let me know, you may not know me, but i'm here for you should you need it

5/5
/Bluey

Very well written. Made me think about things I havent thought about in years. 5/5

Aww, really sad! but i loved it 5/5

Great poem!! and full of life! 5/5

Wow, I think you had a brilliant message here, that was really touching, but I almost think that your rhyming pattern took away from that. Your rhyming forced you lines into varying lengthes and stopped you from being about to use the diction that would really bring this poem to life. This is a huge, passionate subject about promises and how the were broken. Make it so emotional that people cry, the scream inside because it is so sorrowful and so true. Give this poem a life of it's own. Describe the agony of feeling those broken promises. How did you feel to see the "you" dead? What was going through your peom dead? What caused you to do everything you wanted the "you" to promise not to do? Suicide and cutting and death are powerful subjects, but if you don't bring them to life with emotion, the poem can't stand as strong on it's own. Please don't be offended, if you like the poem just the way it is, them ignore what I said about it, they are only suggestions after all.
-Tainted