My Winter

by Truest Lies   Jun 30, 2006


When the pieces come together,
Just to fall apart,
And I hate this puzzle,
In fact have hated it from the start,
So I look up into the sky,
And I wonder at the empty space,
But I know deep inside,
That I am not alone,
I know, deep inside,
That I'm not the only one.

Sometimes there are tears,
And sometimes laughs,
Sometimes there is a maze,
Other times clear-cut paths.
How am I to decide,
What I want to be?
Does anyone know me enough,
To be able to decide for me?

How do I decide,
To let my loved ones go,
Even if I know,
They may be the last to ever return my affections.
How can I stop them from leaving,
If they want to go,
How in the world do I hold a ghost down,
And when they vanish I am left alone in the snow.

The rain bears down,
On my empty hands,
How in the world do I describe this hollow,
What words explain eternal pain,
What poetry tells my story?

How do I find a comforting flame,
to keep me warm through my winter.

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  • 17 years ago

    by ღ»Lσιѕ«ღ

    Great Job!!! I ABSOBLUTELY LOVED the 2nd stanza:

    Sometimes there are tears,
    And sometimes laughs,
    Sometimes there is a maze,
    Other times clear-cut paths.
    How am I to decide,
    What I want to be?
    Does anyone know me enough,
    To be able to decide for me?

    I loved the way you word your poems it makes it where you can paint a picture of it in your mind!!! Flow and Rhyme were wonderful!!! 5/5!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Samantha Hollywood

    T.L. --
    WoW. This was definitely a different kind of poem ;; I don`t believe I`ve ever read one quite like this. But, that`s a good thing, because I loved it. The flow, for one, was perfect. I couldn`t figure out the rhyming pattern, if there was one, but what did rhyme seemed good too. =D
    Much thanks for your comment on my poems ;; meant a lot. I actually rewrote that song last night as a duet ;; but I`m not sure if I`ll post it on P&Q.
    5/5

    Samantha Hollywood

  • 17 years ago

    by Tamra

    Wow. That was amazing. I really liked the metaphors and that I could relate to the poem. It's really incredible how you can almost feel the lonliness and longing just from reading the poem. Great Job, really great.

  • 17 years ago

    by Sarah Ann

    OMG, wow! I'm speechless, that was so beautiful! So beautiful and sad, and related to me! I could feel the coldness through the words, the sense of lonliness and the longings. Excellent poem! I loved the metaphors and imagery! Keep up your great work! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Little Dot

    Great job. Good use of metaphors. I thought this was very well done and easy for me to relate to. The feeling of always being alone and left out in the cold suffering.

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