I've said it before I love ur poems! They always flow so nicely, and have wonderful rhythm! And their emotion is always so strong, and this one is no different. Its beautiful! In such a dark sense. I just love how you showed how he mad eher feel so safe... and then of course, hurt her once more, it just was so strong. I applaud u=) Very Well done! 5/5
Very abrupt ending. I think you could have added one more stanza in there about why - scared of the scars, why? Why did he cheat? Just a thought. I like it though, some of the rhymes seem a bit forced but it's not bad at all, just a little awkward at times.
O' man this was so gooood! I loved it(I don't say I love something very much) It was really good! Whoever gave you just a four on this was totally nuts.
Please r/r/c rose colored glasses and let go!
13 years ago
Amazing poem, really was, sorry if this happened, really am. Its amazing how you kept a ABAB scheme the whole time, takes a lot of skill and you did it flawlessly. Storyline was great, and i couldnt help but give you 5/5
Aww.. that's so sad. I can relate to it, without the self harm and the suicide (of course) but you did a great job on this. It flowed and rhymed well. I loved it. 5/5 Take care.. I hope everything works out for you!