Another Game [Another Dead]

by BrokenMisery   Jul 15, 2006


His journals scrawled on the devil's heart,
But he's the picture of perfection.
A girl's best 'friend'
But they see the outside reflection.

He puts a sl^t in his bedroom
Another wh^re on the kitchen tiles,
Slips off his wedding ring
For another round of smiles.

He's the bitter aftertaste,
The poison through your veins.
He's the one who'll take the innocent
To leave them in HIV chains.

This blonde hair blued eyed masterpiece
Whose lust is not rationale,
Buries women in their graves.
He's just deadly fashionable.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    Wow, that was an interesting write. I guess we write our own thoughts on what those words are. Hmm, cool!

    I thought the title should have read "Death" instead of dead. But it's up to you.

  • 17 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    It started off perfectly but I think you trailed off towards the end.
    ~Emah

  • 17 years ago

    by Momentary Relapse

    The first stanza was the best. It gave a strong sense throughout but there was this flow problem in the last stanza with just the last line. Not sure but it kinda had this weird way to it. The second stanza delivered a powerful picture and well...nice job. Some great things were done with this piece. Great way in how to show a cool idea. Some word play that added this vivid, intense way to the poem.
    ~Faith-less

  • 17 years ago

    by Lost & Delirious

    Wow, this poem's really good. I think it has a very strong message, and that's what I liked the most about it. The ending was amazing, especially the last line. The descriptions were original, well written, and true. You expressed everything in a different way, but I still understood what you meant.

    I loved these lines:

    A girl's best 'friend'
    But they see the outside reflection.

    Great job!

    Keep writing.

    XoXo
    Gaby

  • 17 years ago

    by XxCount bodies like sheep to the rhythm of a war drumxX

    This is an exellent poem. Very good!

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