Your Not Here

by Shelly   Jul 21, 2006


U said u'd always be here for me,
bestfriends forever is what we'd be.
But your not here,
& all i can do is shed a tear
coz nuthin i do will bring you back here.

i told you secrets close to my heart,
that are tearin me & my life apart.
U told me nuthin could go wrong, if i just stayed strong.

U gave me a hand to hold,
wen i was out alone in the cold.
u've helped in in many ways to get over each and every different phaze.

U turned my world around ,
but then left without a sound.
U've hurt me,
in many ways that u may never see.

I don't need u or anyone else anymore,
so that way i can't get hurt like u hurt me before.
So i'm cutting down the bridge that leads me across to everybody else,
nd i'm livin life all by myself.

~*~please comment i need to kno what its like! :)~*~

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  • 17 years ago

    by Sorefromreality

    I loved the last stanza, if u could call it a stanza...u need to work on the structure and grammar...i wanna focus on the poem, not on the symbols and words i cant make out...other than that i liked it alot and the feeling was definetly there. great going,
    love ya lots,
    sore

  • 17 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    Its good...Well I'm going to be honest with you. The flow needs to be worked on, but the rhyming is very good. Keep writing
    --Shannon--

  • 17 years ago

    by Ike Dizzle

    Once again I like the message but it's the form. Some of those sentences, like in the first stanza second line, could be shorten. It will make it look better. You can you different woulds to make them imagine the scenery or your emotion. lol. 5/5
    -Kakashi