Day Dreams

Wow this piece is amazing. It is stunning and the word choice is fantastic. This piece blew me away. This is beautiful as it has been said before, and it really does make the audience stop and think for a moment. 5/5

As the effect of time leaves its eternal mark
Mind in matter, or is it the matter in the mind
That compels us to search for the truth we find?

If I cannot reach heaven let heaven come to me
((I loved all these lines...They spoke with such words that most cannot say. Great job.))

I really enjoyed this... Honestly, I would -love- to see you write a dark poem. If you do, or have one you think I would like, please tell me. I think you'd be amazing at it..One about death of such. You could write it better than anyone I know, I'm sure. Anyways, a wonderful write you have here, just like away. Simply beautiful.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Very beautiful. The flow seemed a little forced in places. But not enough to take away from the beauty of the poem. Very well done.

As always another great poem by a great poet,
one of your best job here, and one of the great poems here in this site,
i really enjoyed reading it,
5/5 and i look forword to read more.

Wow-- This was beautiful. I loved this line: "If I cannot reach heaven let heaven come to me"

A really good write! Your flow was pretty good, and so was the rhyming, great vocab too. Keep it up!

Natalie``