Final Words of Hate
by The Lonely Rose Aug 19, 2006
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19 years ago
by Tiny Reader
I will say the same as I did in my other comment, not because I want to be horrible, but because this is a site which aims to help people improve. You have listed how you feel, and events. You haven't gone any deeper into explaining emotions by using techniques such as imagery and metaphors. Also go easy on the ellipsis (...). It makes your poem look messy and is not necessary.
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19 years ago
by xxmichaelxx
Oh by the way i just went to San Mateo for a vacation. went swimming and stuff.
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19 years ago
by xxmichaelxx
Umm, i'm from burbank, (LA) why? ur welcome :)
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19 years ago
by Natalie
Just please make look like suicide..
^^I think this line needs re-wording. Like add the word "it" after make.
Good poem, too. Though I did think it ended too soon. I was kinda wanting more. But it was still good. Keep it up!
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19 years ago
by Aline
Mmmmmmmm
ur losing ur patinece in ur poem, that's a great thing, i liked it
try as i said before using some rhymes and passion and more of the strong powerful words. m sure it'll be great because i like the way u say everything. it's on top of ur tongue, watever is ur heart u will say it, that's great to do so :)
