My premonition

by -The-Undying-   Aug 20, 2006


As I watch time pass me by.
I stop n' wonder. Why don't my angels ever fly.
I confess my sins as tear drops trickle down from my eyes.
They are stuck here, hidden in a cage and left to die.
When I have deep thoughts of suicide, they hold me down and help me cry.
Feeding my every emotion with certain supply.
My premonition I soon will imply.

I have had far to much to drink tonight.
On nights like this, my thinking's not right.
For tomorrows another day and tonight we fight.

I hear you call my name when no ones around as if I understand your intuition.
For your happiness is part of my mission.
Tonight I talk of premonition, tomorrow we talk of your final admission.

A day will come stricken with grief for all of us.
It may be a traffic jam with words he will cuss.
Going 100 miles an hour he will hit the side of your school bus.
You will be in the middle of an argument, harsh words you will discuss.
Your father will hit your mother, her wounds they will puss.

Your grandmother will die in her sleep.
Leave you and your family to weep.
A friend will tell you your secrets I will keep.
But he is telling people, while you are asleep.
Next day at school with a sudden sweep.
A baseball bat to the head, and a fist for you soon to meet.

You will receive a college scholarship.
You will retain what was once a steady grip.
Your father will accompany you, before he would skip.
And I'm sure you will win an exclusive around the world trip.

I hear you call my name when no ones around as if I understand your intuition.
For your happiness is part of my mission.
Tonight I talk of premonition, tomorrow we talk of your final admission.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Nelle

    Grrr I am so mad. I wrote you the longest comment and then my computer did something crazy =/ i have no idea what it said. but it went something like this. " WOW! I can't even comment on this b/c i don't know what to say. I am completely speechless this showed exactly how life is. well some people's. you expressed your words amazingly" so yepp lol there ya go!

  • 17 years ago

    by twisted reality

    Ooo! I liked this one. =) I liked the title, simple yet meaningful, and I liked the words you chose out. Great write! =) xxoo 5/5

    Samantha

  • 17 years ago

    by Bridgette

    Oops.. sorry on the comma part, I meant this not miss. Sorry once again!

  • 17 years ago

    by Bridgette

    That is really good. It's very different, and it has a nice flow and rhythm. There is one grammatical error that I thought I would point out. On the second line on the second stanza you have:
    On nights like this my, thinkings not right.
    The comma should be after miss, and there should also be an apostrophe after the g on thinkings. That way it read my thinking is not right. But this was a well written poem and sounds very well thought out. Great job on this! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    I really liked the first stanza, it had a lot of meaning. The part about the angels not flying, that was brilliant. I wish I had thought of that line first. I thought it was a great poem, and I ofter have premonitions. They sometimes scare me, but I try hard to clue in to what is going to happen.