Hide The Pain (Prolonged Ending)

by Marcus   Aug 26, 2006


*wrote this at age 13 just consider that

Every day I smile and hide my pain with laughter.
Nobody can see through. Noone can see the pain.
Should I try to be happy and force myself to chase after
The happy things, or should I accept misery and not complain?

I try to think positively through the rain,
And I hope for better days but they just get worse.
Even though inside I know sunny days remain,
All this pain I keep bottled is gonna make me burst!

Everyone thinks I am so happy and full of delight.
But that just proves how little they know and the fact that they're blind.
I am going so crazy in my head I don't even think I can make it through the night;
My head is full of confusion. No where to go but out of my mind!

I seek help from others, but they don't have much to suggest.
So I don't know what to do or where to seek assistance.
So I find myself back at the same place; confused and depressed,
Asking myself what is the point of my existence.

At times I can't focus or concentrate.
Sometimes I just let myself go, and don't worry about my health.
All these thoughts of suicide I cant help but to contemplate.
I just want to know how would it be if I were to kill my self.

Should I be viewed as a bad person because of my curiosity?
Is there something wrong with me wanting to know?
Is this a reason for me to have to endure animosity?
I know Earth is not better than heaven...but is it worse than below?

Suicide is the only way for me to find the answer...but it's not a logical choice
something inside keeps telling me to do it but I know it's far from smart
So I just continue to endure and ignore that little voice
and I will continue to try to preserve all of the sanity in my heart

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  • 15 years ago

    by Annaam

    I like this one better... Each stanza seems to stand out on its own...

    ``Every day I smile and hide my pain with laughter.
    Nobody can see through. Nobody can see the pain.
    Should I try to be happy and force myself to chase after
    The happy things, or should I accept misery and not complain?
    --> How about 'Nobody can see through. No One can see the pain'? Two 'Nobodys' in the same line is kinda repetitive.

    ``All this pain I keep bottled is gonna make me burst!
    --> I agree with the person above. This line... something about it, seems forced.

    ``Everyone thinks I am so happy and full of delight.
    But that just proves how little they know and the fact that they're blind.
    I am going so crazy in my head I don't even think I can make it through the night;
    My head is full of confusion. No where to go but out of my mind!
    --> I love this. The last line is awesome!

    Excellent rhyming and flow in the 4th stanza.

    ``At times I can't focus or concentrate.
    Sometimes I just let myself go, and don't worry about my health.
    All these thoughts of suicide I cant help but to contemplate.
    I just want to know how it would be if I were to kill my self.
    --> Good vOcab. How about '...how Would It Be..' Just a suggestion hmm.

    The 6th stanza is good.

    ``Suicide is the only way for me to find the answer...but it's not a logical choice
    something inside keeps telling me to do it but I know it's far from smart
    So I just continue to endure and continue to ignore that little voice
    and I will continue to try to preserve all of the sanity in my heart
    --> This is a very good ending. How about 'So i just continue to endure And Ignore That Little voice', just to make it short n non-repetitive? :)

    Great Work! 5/5 :).

  • 16 years ago

    by SuperJenius

    In the second stanza the B-rhyme of worse and burst seemed a bit forced, but other than that the poem was great. I loved the last two stanzas.

  • 17 years ago

    by Sandra D

    I like this one better than the first one!!! i love the ending, it's amazing!!!!! i really don't know what else to say... great job! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Wow..you have lots of talent, this was very good.

  • 17 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    Another masterpeace

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