Just Friends

That was such a great poem of urs u must have wrote it about somone u like but i love it, it was great ur poems are really great and really get to compare my life to but yea i like some guy but he lives far away

Just the poem i was looking for.
it's always nice to know that there are others that are going through the same thing you are going through as well.

Omg this is so sweet. i just love your writing... its so real and i can tell you mean it. i can feel your words and you have such a unique talent. keep up the good work. i'm adding you to my favourites because you are a brilliant writer!! 5/5

When you are around it is heated like fire
((I do not like this line...Reword it.))
that is the way you inspire
me to write this as a way to inquire
((Poor ...word choice? Yes, I think that is it.))

* You broke the AAAA rhyme scheme into a ABAB rhyme scheme in the middle of the poem! Don't do that! It just shows you do not have enough vocabulary to support your words...And if you mean to do that... It really wrecked the poem.

if we was to give us a try it would last so long
((If you were to give us a try... {Grammar mistake}))
The girl I always see in my fantasy
if I don't get you I might lose my sanity
((Sounds forced... Like you did not know what else to say, or did not have another word to rhyme with...))
I feel like you have given me no chance
to show you the true definition of romance
nothing I could do to enhance;
you because me and you are a perfect match
and just so attached
can't let go or break loose even if I wanted to
why are you always fronting when you know I've always wanted you

Even though we got a good bond that can't be broken
I want to be more than friends and will always be hoping!
((Why did you break format? Of the four lines? Bad!!!! And the rhyming is all over the place...Why? That makes no sense!))
I feel like you have given me no chance
to show you the true definition of romance
((Nicely done.. I like these lines.))
can't let go or break loose even if I wanted to
why are you always fronting when you know I've always wanted you
(( Ok, rapper... 'Fronting' is NOT a word you use in a love poem, tiger. Try a different word.))

Even though we got a good bond that can't be broken
I want to be more than friends and will always be hoping!
((Even though we *have* a good bond that can't be broken..))
((Broken and hoping doesn't rhyme very well.. they do not flow well together. And the last sentence does NOT make sense...To me..))

Hope that helps... Tell me if you revise it and I will come back to critize!
xDarkSuicidex

This was a really great awesome poem w/o a doubt! And the rhyming sheme was cool! It flowed very smooth. you are very talented indeed. and you should just tell that girl how u feel and show her this poem im sure she will feel extra special!