The Ending Of the day

by Letty   Sep 26, 2006


The sun sets slowly as I watch it
from across the lake.

The moon peaks out quickly as it
ends another day.

The sounds of the day decrease
because everyone's safe at home.

I watch a homeless Collie quietly
lick his empty bone.

I lift my head to search the sky
for a special star that's there.

I find the one I'm looking for and
begin my evening prayers.

After praying for the homeless,
children, and love ones to be
safe.

I lift my head back toward the sky
to thank God for this day.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Lauren Waszkiewicz

    I really like this poem, it was religious and nature-iffic. even though im not a religious person i like reading poems about god, or gods, or anything apiritual because they show hope i guess.

    A few litlle things, the second line in each pair is shorter in the first few stanzas but then becomes longer and then adds another line .. i dont like htis, i think it should be a little more consistant, either by adding another word or two in the first few stanzas or losing a bit in the others. and the one with 3 lines just threw me off, it shouldnt just have one word, if its going to have a 3rd line(which is fine) i think it should be slightly longer maybe(also should be love'd')
    After praying for the homeless,
    children, and loveD ones to be
    safe from harm, or out of harms way. or something...

    But anyways a very sweet poem, it was cool like thosedorky parayers you learna dn love, its liek this could be come one. Great Job.

    x.x:Lauren

  • 17 years ago

    by blueknight

    Wow how good you are in nature poems I like how you penned it very beautiful the flow was really well and I love it

    Geneross

  • 17 years ago

    by Natalie

    This was such a beautiful poem, Letty. Great imagery, I could really picture someone kneeling down praying towards the stars in the sky. A very nice job! Keep it up! 5/5

    Natalie``

  • 17 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Very calm and tranquil poem. Great flow. One suggestion:
    " find the one I'm looking for and
    begin my evening prayer's.

    After praying for the homeless,"

    You could get rid of the "S" after Prayer. Also you used the word "pray" in two back to back lines.

    ^-^Keep it up

  • 17 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    Quite a spiritual and thankful poem. The format and language is very simple, but then again the subject is too, just praying and thanking God for the day. I liked it because the meaning is clear and effective.
    I noticed a couple of errors when reading, I hope you don't mind me pointing out.
    The line "The sounds of the day decreases" is a double plural, therefore, a S needs to be dropped from somewhere.
    On line ten, it should be "...star that's there."
    Thanks for sharing this inspiring read.