Together Forever

by Brittany C   Oct 16, 2006


When you hold me tight,
Late into the night,
And we share our love,
I can fill my heart sore,
High on the wings of a dove,
Making me fill like I could scale,
the tallest mountain,
For your love is always there,
To lighten my load,

So we lay there side by side,
Hand in hand,
Staring up at the sparkling heavens above,

We talk of the future,
Of you and me,
I can almost see it,
And all of a sudden all fills right,
As if we were made to be together,

Till the day we die,
In each one another's arms,
Each knowing,
We would wait on the other side,
Till the other came,
To hold each other tight,
And we know everything will be alright.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    I must say I rather enjoyed this one, well written, great flow, absoulty heartfelt emtion,
    and excelletn word choice 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Ksusha

    U have a great way with words just work on ur technique a little.

  • 17 years ago

    by allison

    I think everyones writting is diffrent
    and no matter how its written
    you had alot of meaning to this poem
    and i rather enjoyed it

    Awesome.

  • 17 years ago

    by Rocky

    This poem reads to much like a story. its theme is good but the sentences are 2 long. i i personally try to keep my senteces as short and descriptive as possible. you should also use adjectives a bit more.

    eg no longer do i cry
    when you hold me tight
    into the night
    as we share our love
    my heart sores high
    on the wings of a dove
    then i could scale
    the tallest mountains
    while your love lightens my load

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