Flowers in the meadow

by Letty   Oct 26, 2006


Deep in the meadow
where the wild flowers grow
are multiple blooms of different species
from Israel beautiful orchids
to the orange sweetheart rose.

These props of nature
are breathtakingly beautiful
they form a multi-colored chain
when the sun is out they tournesol
they create a rainbow when it rains.

Surrounded by hpericum berries
and variegated pittosporum too
The sunflower instructs them
in their radiant dance of love
that will enthrall and dazzle you.
Pink stargazer lilies mingle
with the glorious daisies
to form a gerbora bouquet

Moon-shadow carnations kiss the orchids
at the end of each wonderful day.

Together they stand in their own circle of life
and they bring us such peacefulness
that we can enjoy beyond the eye.

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For those of you that don't know what tournesol means: It means turn with the sun.

I also wrote this poem for a contest and I was trying to be opened minded and not use so many of the same words. I would appreciate any comments or critique on this poem because it will only help me to become better as a poet.

Thank you !

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  • 18 years ago

    by Mommy And Me

    I really enjoyed reading this poem. even your title grabbed me. and i don't usually go for a title. haha!! well anyways. the only problem i had in reading it was in this line.

    are breathtakingly beautiful

    i think if you change the wording a bit and find a nother word for beauitufl it would flow better.

  • 19 years ago

    by Reagan Lausche

    I love this poem! You pulled everything together really nicely and it flows good without having to rhyme as often. 5/5

  • 19 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Here's my critique: I love the images and your word choice. My favorite line was,
    "Moon-shadow carnations kiss the orchids
    at the end of each wonderful day."

    There were some spots that could have had better transition.
    In the first Stanza, you started out beautifully, but in the line
    "are multiple blooms of different species" The Use of "Are" breaks the flow and the emotion.
    Keep it up!^-^

  • 19 years ago

    by TheWorldFellNUWerentThere

    It was hard for me to follow through! But you used alot of words that made me go runing to the dictionary. so 5/5

  • 19 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Moon-shadow carnations kisse the orchids
    ((Kiss))

    I loved this. I useually hate poems that don't rhyme, for the flow seems broken, but this had a great flow to it. I'll be honest, I didn't follow half of the flower names, but it was still beautifully written. Great job.

    xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex 5.5

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