I Can Hold

by BeautifulxMess   Nov 17, 2006


When you look at another girl
I hope you're thinking I'm better.
When you touch someone else
just know you've kept me together.

Sweetheart, you take my heart
somewhere far into the sky.
Release my pain and my stress
along with the tears that I cry.

Hope finds me when I'm with you,
and sorriness passes by me.
Happiness keeps me to you, and
you help me be what I want to be.

You spread my wings a mile out,
and helped me fly into space.
Time with you is precious and rare,
and can't ever be replaced.

I love you more than words speak,
and you help me through my day.
You shine a light through my eyes,
and keep my fears drifting away.

Sweetheart, you captured my soul,
and you have a heart solid gold.
When I want to fall on my knees
I'll have your love I can hold.

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  • 17 years ago

    by *Wishes do come true*

    Aw this was a very nice poem! I really enjoyed reading this Good job!

  • 17 years ago

    by samara

    Wow. . . that was an amazing poem . . . great job

  • 17 years ago

    by emmerz

    I really liked the idea to this one... but there were some rough patches... like the flow in some spots was a bit bumpy, and there were some lines i just didnt get. but overall, i thought the idea was very well carried through, and with a few tweaks this could be something good.

  • 17 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    This is a typical teenage I love you and I hope you love me too poem. It was ok as they go, but ok is really the limits of this subject. The use of rhyme was good, no sign of it being forced. In the third stanza the used of "sorriness" seems clumsy. Also in places the wording could be better for example on the second line of the last stanza it should be " heart of solid gold."
    Not a bad poem overall, keep writing and keep improving.

  • 17 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    This poem has a beautiful meaning into it, and as i was reading it, i was pretanding that someone is talling to me.... that way i found a great meaning into it, which is knowing and feeling ppl around us, who loves us? who truly wants us?
    reading this poem you have taken me into a world of thinking, thinking about ok i have wrote alot about how someone has deceves me in love, but let me think if in anyway i have not relized someone around me, who might have love me...........
    i give u a 5/5 for this wonderful poem, really well written by a talented poet.

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