My Black Knight (rewritten)

I've got a few pointers for you here too:

stanza 2:
The handsome one that sent me
looks of promises, pleasure,
AND romance beyond my dreams.
(put "and" from line 2 to the beginning of line 3)

last stanza:
Where is my black knight? I ask again.
I'm hoping he comes today.
Because time will not stand still for us,
and I don't want OUR love to fade away.
(i'd move "because" from end of line 2 to beginning of line 3, and in the last line, change "are" to "our")

So rare in life, to us they come, A spirit kind with loving care, With memories deep to linger on, A breath with shortness drawn.... beautiful express emotions you penned here letty, though simply.. i know how it feel, well done!

~ I sung a song ~ i will post it soon, or you can read shadow of ray3 at mysite.

have a great day! mybest wishes for you and yours, take care.

I love this poem:)

Letty, if u have noticed, i had 6 comments when u commented my poem, and i really appriciate ur comment, also, by now u should know this, WE CAN NOT DELECTE COMMENT...

what was it, i got a stupid comment from a friend FRESHTA, who wrote something about my personal life, which i didnt want to share with others so i had to delete the poem and re-post it.i really appoligize for that, and as ur downvoting go, trust me i will never do anything like this to u or to anyone else.i dont know why u call me ur E-Friend when i really appriciate ur friendship?

ps.... now im voting a 5/5 to this poem so u know it is not me who downvoted u........ i hope u trust me